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अनुबाद - अल्बेनियन-अंग्रेजी - Anes lumenjve

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यो हरफ निम्न भाषामा उपलब्ध छ: अल्बेनियनअंग्रेजी

Category Poetry

This translation request is "Meaning only".
शीर्षक
Anes lumenjve
हरफ
kfetoद्वारा बुझाइएको
स्रोत भाषा: अल्बेनियन

Anes lumenjve

Arratisur, syrgjynosur,
Raskapitur dhe katosur
Po vajtonj pa funt, pa shpresë,
Anës Elbës, anës Spree-së.


Ku e lam' e ku na mbeti
Vaj-vatani e mjer-mileti
Anës detit i palarë,
Anës dritës i paparë,
Pranë sofrës i pangrënë,
Pranë dijes i panxënë,
Lakuriq dhe i dregosur,
Trup e shpirt i sakatosur?

शीर्षक
by the rivers
अनुबाद
अंग्रेजी

eleonora13द्वारा अनुबाद गरिएको
अनुबाद गर्नुपर्ने भाषा: अंग्रेजी

By the rivers

Fugitive, out in exile,
Exhausted, and threatened,
They mourn endlessly and hopeless
By the Elbes, by the Spreese

Where we left it, and where it stayed
Oh the homeland, and the poor nation
Beside the dirty ocean

Beside the light, unseen
Near the dinner table, uneaten
Close by the clue, that doesn't fit,
Naked and tortured,
Body and soul murdered?
अनुबादका लागि चाहिन सक्ने थप जानकारी
Elbes and Spreese are names of rivers in Albania so i left it as it is.
Validated by lilian canale - 2008年 मे 31日 13:09





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सन्देश

2008年 मे 18日 02:32

lilian canale
चिठ्ठीको सङ्ख्या: 14972
Hi eleonora,

Since this seems to be a poem, I'd try to make it look like one in English too.
Perhaps we could change some structures and words to achieve that.

- What about instead of "without end" using "endlessly"
or instead of "without hope" using "hopeless".? I think this line would be quite shorter and similar to the original.
"They mourn endlessly and hopeless"

- beside the Elbes, beside the Spreese (I'd use "by" instead : By the Elbes, by the Spreese)

- "Where we left it"
What does "it" stand for? Wouldn't it be "him"? Isn't it talking about a person? I didn't understand that part.

- Does the original repeat "poor" in the 7th line?

- "unwashed ocean" ?

- Perhaps we can change "mutilated" into "murdered" so that it makes a better rhyme with "tortured".

What do you think?
Poetry is always difficult, but you did a great job. These are just a few suggestions in order to get a nice rhyme. It's up to you, now.


2008年 मे 21日 02:18

lilian canale
चिठ्ठीको सङ्ख्या: 14972
Hi eleonora13,

Two days later, I'm still waiting...

2008年 मे 25日 22:53

eleonora13
चिठ्ठीको सङ्ख्या: 19
I'm sorry but I'am having some difficulties with my internet connection lately.I really think that your suggestions are great.Would you like to do the editing?

2008年 मे 25日 23:32

lilian canale
चिठ्ठीको सङ्ख्या: 14972
Hi eleonora, no problem.
You can edit it if you agree.

2008年 मे 31日 20:42

kfeto
चिठ्ठीको सङ्ख्या: 953
ok thank you both girls