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Anes lumenjve

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Anes lumenjve

Arratisur, syrgjynosur,
Raskapitur dhe katosur
Po vajtonj pa funt, pa shpresÃ«,
AnÃ«s ElbÃ«s, anÃ«s Spree-sÃ«.

Ku e lam' e ku na mbeti
Vaj-vatani e mjer-mileti
AnÃ«s detit i palarÃ«,
AnÃ«s dritÃ«s i paparÃ«,
PranÃ« sofrÃ«s i pangrÃ«nÃ«,
PranÃ« dijes i panxÃ«nÃ«,
Lakuriq dhe i dregosur,
Trup e shpirt i sakatosur?

Статус	by the rivers
Перевод Английский Перевод сделан eleonora13	Язык, на который нужно перевести: Английский By the rivers Fugitive, out in exile, Exhausted, and threatened, They mourn endlessly and hopeless By the Elbes, by the Spreese Where we left it, and where it stayed Oh the homeland, and the poor nation Beside the dirty ocean Beside the light, unseen Near the dinner table, uneaten Close by the clue, that doesn't fit, Naked and tortured, Body and soul murdered?
Комментарии для переводчика	Elbes and Spreese are names of rivers in Albania so i left it as it is.

Последнее изменение было внесено пользователем lilian canale

- 31 Май 2008 13:09

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		18 Май 2008 02:32
	lilian canale Кол-во сообщений: 14972	Hi eleonora, Since this seems to be a poem, I'd try to make it look like one in English too. Perhaps we could change some structures and words to achieve that. - What about instead of "without end" using "endlessly" or instead of "without hope" using "hopeless".? I think this line would be quite shorter and similar to the original. "They mourn endlessly and hopeless" - beside the Elbes, beside the Spreese (I'd use "by" instead : By the Elbes, by the Spreese) - "Where we left it" What does "it" stand for? Wouldn't it be "him"? Isn't it talking about a person? I didn't understand that part. - Does the original repeat "poor" in the 7th line? - "unwashed ocean" ? - Perhaps we can change "mutilated" into "murdered" so that it makes a better rhyme with "tortured". What do you think? Poetry is always difficult, but you did a great job. These are just a few suggestions in order to get a nice rhyme. It's up to you, now.
		21 Май 2008 02:18
	lilian canale Кол-во сообщений: 14972	Hi eleonora13, Two days later, I'm still waiting...
		25 Май 2008 22:53
	eleonora13 Кол-во сообщений: 19	I'm sorry but I'am having some difficulties with my internet connection lately.I really think that your suggestions are great.Would you like to do the editing?
		25 Май 2008 23:32
	lilian canale Кол-во сообщений: 14972	Hi eleonora, no problem. You can edit it if you agree.
		31 Май 2008 20:42
	kfeto Кол-во сообщений: 953	ok thank you both girls