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Hi NPazarka,

It seems to be a poem, therefore I think we should keep the lines the way they are in the original.
Would you edit mantaining the length of the lines, please?

Lilian,

NPazarka did an excellent job. If you keep the length of lines the same translation might loose it's original meaning.

Cheers

Sure, she did a great job!
However when translating poetry we have to make an effort in order to create a poem in the target language as well. Sometimes we need to change the original words to get some rhyme (if the original has it).
It's quite difficult getting a good translation from a word-by-word work.
What is important is keeping the meaning.
I don't think this translation would be "harmed" if we try to make it look like a poem.

My suggestion:

I'm watching over you,
nobody else will touch you
On the palm of my hand
You're my engraved secret

I'm watching over you,
wherever I go you are
On the palm of my hand
You're my lifeline.

my love

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