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Submetigx per  ji2 | Font-lingvo: Pola
Tęsknota nade mną szeleszcze.
Trąca mnie skrzydłem mewiem.
Czy wciąż ta sama jeszcze?
Nie wiem! nie wiem...
(Maria Pawlikowska-Jasnorzewska) |
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Yearning swishes upon my head.
Touches me with a seagull's wing.
Is it still the same one?
I don't know! I don't know...
(Maria Pawlikowska-Jasnorzewska)
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Laste validigita aŭ redaktita de Tantine - 28 Januaro 2008 21:23
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25 Januaro 2008 16:39 | | | Hi Olesniczanin
Maybe "seagull" should be in one word?
I'm not sure about the choice of the word "swishes", which is a word I associate more with cloth, curtains, large twirling dresses or skirts, or with paint but not really with seagulls or yearning.
I've opened a poll because I don't speak any Polish at all 
Bises
Tantine
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26 Januaro 2008 17:20 | | | Hi Tantine,
thanks for your remarks.
According to wiki: "In common usage, members of various gull species are often referred to as sea gulls or seagulls." Anyway, "seagull" really might be smoother as I think it's more common than "sea gull".
As far as "swishes" is concerned, what would you suggest instead? "Rustles"? I picked "swishes" because it's connected with silk and makes a nice alliteration. What do you think?
Oleśniczanin.
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26 Januaro 2008 22:39 | | | Hi 
I like the word "swishes".
It makes me think of "swoop", "rustle",
We can keep it
bises
Tantine | | |
27 Januaro 2008 11:13 | | | Hi Tantine,
"Seagull" is corrected, we keep "swishes" . Once again, thanks for your remarks.
Oleśniczanin. | | |
28 Januaro 2008 00:04 | | | Hi Olesniczanin
I'll validate your text now
Enjoy your points 
Bises 
Tantine |
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