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Hi lenab,

This is very good, I'd just use "you would whisper in my ear" and "another" as a sole word.

What do you think?

I guess we won't even need a poll for I can see the meaning is perfectly correct (despite my still poor Swedish )

Yes, I guess you're right. I separated another to have som stress on the "other", but that might not be needed.
In Swedish the "viskar" is in present tense, but I Think I've learned that the past tense conditional should be matched with an imperfect. Do you think I should have "would" ?

Exactly! You've learned it right, now we have to use it correctly.
In a conditional sentence, you should use the combination: If + Simple past + Conditional.
That's why I asked you a conditional form for "whisper".

If you kissed my lips, I could be in your warm embrace and you would whisper in my ear: I love you. Then,

Do you agree?

Well, I'd say : If you kissed me, I could be in[...] and you wispered, then I would be.... What do you say?

I'm sorry lenab, I'd say that's wrong in English.
For using it that way you should have a second conditional sentence, but in Swedish you don't.

It should be:

If you kissed my lips, I could be in your warm embrace and if you whispered in my ear: I love you, then I'd be the happiest girl on earth.

See what I mean?
That would be the ideal construction, but it's a little different from the original.

Don't you think there are three things going with thw "if" here? If they all three are fullfilled, she would be the happiest girl...That's how I interpret it. Is it wrong, do you think?

Please read again my post above, I've edited it to make myself understood better.

Ok, then I agree!! I just didn't dare do that change. Thanks!

Now you got it!