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Well, I had a problem with tenses here, as usual...
In Polish source it seems to be Praesent Continuous...- everywhere

The sunlight penetrates through the Earth -
Cold Mother of Beauty
Life-bringing rays
Warm wet roots

Stalks dance lithely
They quickly bear leaves
They spill over with lush greenery
With fragrant blossoms

In the mountains of Thy majesty
Every creation leads us
to ADORATION
of Thy generosity

P.S. I really like this one - it speaks to me.

To me too... Thank you, dear!
The meaning was conveyed in 100 percent! And "lithely"! I was looking for the accurate word and this is the best! The same with "lush"...

"Every creation leads us
to ADORATION
of Thy generosity"

You have changed the meaning here a bit, but I suppose that it is still close to my feeling...

Thank you!!!

And what will Lilly say?

I didn't understand how "creation" can "preach" - I took this part to mean that when we look at the beauty that God has created, it forces us to appreciate His generosity. Is that what you meant?

It was only a metaphor...

Ania has also translated the poem (maybe even before me), so we can think about her version too.

The light penetrates the Earth
- the cold Mother of Beauty.
The Life-giving streaks
Warm up the soggy roots

The stems are dancing flexibly.
swiftly giving birth to the leaves
Being covered with verdure
and blossoming fragrantly.

In the mountains of Your Majesty
All creation
Proclaims admiration of
Your Generosity

Thank you, Ania!

The sunlight penetrates through the Earth -
Cold Mother of Beauty
Life-bringing rays
Warm wet roots

Stalks dance lithely
They quickly bear leaves
They spill over with lush greenery
With fragrant blossoms

In the mountains of Thy Majesty
All creation
Proclaims ADORATION of
Thy Generosity

Compilation of Laura's, Ania's and my ideas...

Looks good.

I'm glad. For me too

But, what's better?

"I adore Thee" or "I worship Thee"?

They're both OK. BTW, Aneta, if you want the translator to work on the title, it should be in the translation field too. Otherwise she doesn't get credit for it. Of course, in this case YOU are the translator!

Oh! I didn't know about it! Thank you!

But "adore" can be used also to people, while
"worship" only to God, am I right?

Yes, basically, but when you use "Thee", it's clear that it's about God.

I have already edited the translation. Could you check it now, dear Laura?

I've made a few small changes (start --> begin to, the Creator God --> God the Creator) and I'll accept this if iluvmilka and one or two others say it's OK.

The problem is, how do I rate this, since you initially translated it yourself, but the current version is a conglomeration of your version, ania's version, and my corrections???

CC: lilian canale

If you are asking what I would do, I'd say that IMO it would be fair accepting it with no rating.

Ah yes - I forgot about that option - thanks, Lilian.

Very nice idea, Lilly
Thanks a lot to all great translators of my poems!