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翻译 - 法语-英语 - Mon géniteur. La tête se déchire Le cÅ“ur cogne ...当前状态 翻译
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讨论区 灌水  本翻译"仅需意译"。 | Mon géniteur. La tête se déchire Le cÅ“ur cogne ... | | 源语言: 法语
Mon géniteur.
La tête se déchire
Le cœur cogne
Tu as sans vergogne
pris ma liberté.
Tu fus mon père
Tu es parti
mais la douleur reste encore
me privant, à jamais, de ma sérénité.
J'étais un enfant
sans défense
L'enfant a grandit
sans avoir comprit
Tu m'as imploré mon pardon
que je ne pouvais te donner
Tu es parti sans,
et moi, je reste,
les ailes brisées à jamais.
Tu es parti
sans que j'ai pu te dire
que le père que tu fus avant
me manque et que je l'aime
Maintenant les larmes peuvent enfin couler. | | I would like if Lilian would accept to translate these words for me, although she is overworked,
but I'm not in a hurry. |
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| | | 目的语言: 英语
My genitor.
The head tears
The heart pounds
You have, shamelessly
taken my freedom.
You were my father
You are gone
but the pain still remains
depriving me, forever, of my serenity.
I was a child
defenseless
The child has grown up
unable to understand
You've begged my pardon
which I couldn't give you
You left without,
and I remain,
wings broken forever.
You're gone
and I could not tell you
that I miss the father you were before
and that I love him
Now the tears can finally flow |
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由 Bamsa 认可或编辑 - 2009年 九月 29日 08:39
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2009年 九月 28日 01:01 | | | I hope you are not disappointed, Lene 
I did my best. | | |
2009年 九月 28日 01:09 | | | | | |
2009年 九月 28日 01:13 | | | Oh, thanks, dear Lene.  I'm glad you liked my version, I didn't try to get any rhyme since deep feelings don't need to rhyme, just to be honestly expressed.
That's a beautiful poem.  | | |
2009年 九月 28日 01:28 | | | | | |
2009年 九月 28日 09:12 | | | Fine, but excuse me, isn't possible to translate "géniteur" into english.
Il y a là comme un sens second, à ne pas vouloir dire "mon père" comme pour lui dénier ce rôle 
Bonne semaine à toutes et tous | | |
2009年 九月 28日 15:17 | | | Yes, Burduff, of course you're right, but it just that I didn't want to discuss this translation too
much, and I really find Lilian's translation perfect. But of course we could translate this word "géniteur" into English, perhaps "procreator".
Can you do it, Lilian, please. And thanks again.
CC: Burduf | | |
2009年 九月 28日 15:40 | | | Beautiful poem and excellent translation! I was moved so much... | | |
2009年 九月 28日 15:48 | | | Thanks little one.  And as you say: excellent
translation.  | | |
2009年 九月 28日 16:11 | | | Actually I was in doubt about whether I should translate "géniteur" as "genitor", which even being the scientific noun for parent, it establishes a distance, a lack of affection in the relationship.
If that is what you meant, Lene, I'll edit. | | |
2009年 九月 28日 23:14 | | | Well, it's quite funny, Lilian, because I didn't know it myself, before Burduff spoke about it, and I realised that, actually, he was right. So, yes, please, if you could correct it to genitor it would be fine. And one more time, thanks so much, dear Lilian. CC: Burduf |
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Joking. Now I'll go to bed . Enjoy your evening. And thanks for your big heart. 
