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Tradução - Esperanto-Inglês - La viro estis starita sur la roko, kun mezaĝa...

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La viro estis starita sur la roko, kun mezaĝa...
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Enviado por alireza
Língua de origem: Esperanto

La viro estis starita sur la roko, kun mezaĝa vizaĝo, ridetis, mi sentis varman manon sur mian ŝultron, mi revenis mian vizaĝon, virino kun longaj haroj, ŝia hararo malstreĉiĝis, lumoj kiuj reflektis de akvo, estis dancataj sur lia vizaĝo, lumo, varmego, la virino estis juna kaj ŝia korbo estis pli granda ol mia,
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The man was standing on the rock, with middle-aged...
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Inglês

Traduzido por ArenaL5
Língua alvo: Inglês

The man was standing on the rock, with a middle-aged face, he smiled, I felt a warm hand on my shoulder, I turned my face, a woman with long hair, her hair loose, lights which reflected on the water, were dancing on her face, light, such intense warmth, the woman was young and her basket was bigger than mine,...
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The translation is almost literal - that juxtaposed, fragmented sentences are unnatural in Esperanto too. Most likely this fragment was automatically translated from other non-European language.

"Malstreĉiĝis" means "unstretched" (verb), I translated it as "curled".

"Varmego" could either be "intense warmth" or "heat", I translated it as "such intense warmth"
Última validação ou edição por lilian canale - 8 Julho 2012 22:45





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24 Junho 2012 15:47

lilian canale
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Hi Arenal,

I've made a few minor edits to look better in English.
I wonder, however if that "Malstreĉiĝis" could be translated as: "loose".

Before edits:


The man was standing on the rock, with middle-aged face, smiled, I felt a warm hand on my shoulder, I turned my face, a woman with long hairs, her hair curled, lights which reflected on the water, were dancing on his face, light, such intense warmth, the woman was young and her basket was bigger than mine,

25 Junho 2012 11:44

ArenaL5
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I only have one complaint: in "were dancing on her face", the original reads "lia". Lia means "his" and cannot be used for someone which we know is a woman.

I think "Malstreĉiĝis" can be translated that way. ("loosed", in any case)

Thank you for your interest, again. Could you replace a typo of mine in my translation note? "that yuxtaposed" should be "those juxtaposed".

25 Junho 2012 11:53

Francky5591
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Hi ArenaL5

"Those juxtaposed, fragmented sentences..."

You're welcome!

25 Junho 2012 14:41

lilian canale
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Hi Arenal,

As Alireza confirmed (He wrote: "this is a Persian/Farsi text in original and i translated it direct from Persian to Esperanto" ) the original may be faulty and "Lia" may be wrong. It seems to me that "her face" fits better and makes more sense in the context, don't you agree?
About "loose"...I suggested the adjective not the verb.
The typos are corrected.

27 Junho 2012 12:21

ArenaL5
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Thanks for the corrections, Francky5591 and lilian canale.

If Alireza himself said the original may be faulty, then I have no reason to complain hahaha. It would be good if he could check it so we can be sure.

Actually, it does make more sense in the way you say.

For "loose"... yeah, adjective "loose" looks more natural, please throw it in (checking again my translation, maybe it's even more exact than "curled".