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Catégorie Explications - Arts / Création / Imagination | | Texte
Proposé par  Xini | Langue de départ: Italien
AirLines prende in considerazione l'inquinamento atmosferico, prodotto non solo al livello dei processi industriali, basati sulle innumerevoli quanto inarrestabili attività di utilizzo energetico, ma ancor prima per quanto riguarda la produzione della stessa energia. AirLines punta a stimolare nel visitatore una profonda analisi dei meccanismi di produzione e utilizzo dell'energia, mettendolo in diretto rapporto con gli effetti che tali meccanismi causano sull'ambiente e sugli esseri viventi. Ciò che l'uomo immette nell'atmosfera è anche ciò che ogni giorno respira; ciò che smaltisce ritorna, causando al pianeta effetti devastanti. Dunque, dobbiamo ancora una volta chiederci se sia proprio necessario trascinarci dietro, assieme al lungimirante progresso, la responsabilità di un'indiscriminata assuefazione al consumo. |
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| AirLines - Atmospheric Pollution | TraductionAnglais
Traduit par  Tantine | Langue d'arrivée: Anglais
AirLines takes into consideration the atmospheric pollution produced, not only due to the magnitude of industrial processes, based on the incalculable and incessant activities of energy use but, first and foremost, concerning the production of this energy itself. AirLines aims to stimulate in its visitors a profound analysis of the mechanisms of production and use of energy, confronting them directly with the effects that such mechanisms are having on the atmosphere and on living beings. What Man emits into the atmosphere is also what Man breathes in every day; what goes up must come down, causing devastating effects upon the planet. So once again, we have to ask ourselves if we really need to drag behind us, together with the far-sighted progress, the responsibility for such indiscriminate addiction to consumption. | Commentaires pour la traduction | "what goes up must come down" is an English idiom
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Dernière édition ou validation par Francky5591 - 12 Juin 2007 21:19
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8 Juin 2007 13:08 | | 
appleNombre de messages: 972 | I will make a few comments on this text:
2nd line
"...processi industriali, basati sulle innumerevoli quanto inarrestabili attività ..." ( it is all plural. Did you translate all singular on purpose? I mean, would "processes" and "activities" sound weird?
"Prima ancora" (lit. even before, still first) has rather a "time" meaning (first we produce the energy, then the industry uses this
energy) but I really don't know mwhat I could suggest instead of "above all" ...first of all, maybe, but it's not exact.
Last sentence
"proprio" is not "own" here, it is an adverb meaning "really, exactly"
My suggestion (just for the meaning, of course)
So once again, we have to ask ourselves if we really need to drag behind us, together with the far-sighted progress, the responsibility for such indiscriminate addiction to consumption.
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8 Juin 2007 13:41 | | | I see a couple of subtle but significant errors, but I cannot fix them at this moment. Please leave this target pending my return. Thanks! | | |
8 Juin 2007 20:30 | | 
XiniNombre de messages: 1655 | About the idiom, I would omit the quotes.
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8 Juin 2007 20:41 | | | It's done! 
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8 Juin 2007 20:46 | |
XiniNombre de messages: 1655 | Thank you for yer work, Tantine. | | |
8 Juin 2007 20:50 | | | You're welcome Xini, I enjoyed doing it  I hope I didn't misunderstand too much, I got lots of help from Apple as it was my first try.
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9 Juin 2007 02:02 | | | I had to make quite a few edits, including these:
unquantifiable (cannot be measured, maybe because too small) -> incalculable (too big to measure); facing -> confronting; have in tow (drag) -> convey (carry along, pass to future generations); effects ... causing to -> effects...having on (causes have effects, not vice versa); responsibility for -> consequences of.
Here responsibility is the literal translation and almost the correct meaning, except it has a sense of something optional, which I think sabotages the rest of the text.
Tantine, environmentalist texts like this require exquisite care. You did a very good job and if I had not read so much stuff like this I would have approved your translation as written.
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9 Juin 2007 06:44 | | | Thaks for the precisions Una
This last phrase has caused quite an amount of discussion between Apple and myself
I am not sure however for the substitution of the word "responsibility" by the word "consequences" as the word "consequences" removes all responsibility from Man and makes him a simple victim instead of being the perpetrator of the damages which are created.
I agree with you that environmentalist texts need particular care as one just one word can change the whole meaning.
I hope my next try will be better.
Hugs
Tantine
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9 Juin 2007 13:16 | |
appleNombre de messages: 972 | I agree with you, Una, about the care needed for environmentalist texts, but this particular text, as a few others requested by Xini, is also a sort of presentation of his group artwork. So, the Italian here is rather a "creative" kind of language.
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In a normal text about an enviromental subject in Italian we wouldn't say "trascinarci dietro" but trasmettere (=convey): trascinarsi dietro is "to drag" "to lag"(and has nothing to do with future generations, as I see it, it's something that we trail behind us, not ahead of us).
"Responsabilità " is different from "consequences": the stress here should be on the individual responsibility.
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