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My translation

Comprehension

Oh Warrior Being!
Of the red dawn
Of the precise convergence
Why do you walk together
With the pain of your soul?
A misunderstood pain!
Oh Warrior Being!
In this path
You will destroy dreams
You will annihilate lives
Through a futile and brute
feeling
Because in the end
Everything will fall
Even your pain!

Thanks for your input Cláudio Manoel, but please, next time just post what you think may be improved instead of copy/pasting the whole text with minor changes. Just pointing out those changes would be enough to make it easier for the expert to evaluate.

Ex:
Going this path ---> In this path
Wipe out lives ---> You will annihilate lives
Everything will collapse ---> Everything will fall


BTW...Why did you request this translation if you think you are able to do it better?




CC: Francky5591

I apologize Lilian. I didn't want to be better or something similar. I made those small alterations because the epic poem and due to that I think some words can have a strong translation, what is typical of epic poems. In fact, I was very busy in the last days to do my own translation. Next time I put two versions. My excuses again.